This week in Ms. Wilson’s 4th-grade class we started by asking ourselves about a time we were surprised. We then read the poem, “Skating in the Wind” by Kristine O’Connell George. The poem ends on a pretty surprising line, so we took some time to go over what we’ve learned about line so far. We noticed that line-breaks can also be used to surprise the reader, so we decided to give that a try in our own poems. O’Connell George also has some really nice similes in their poem, the students found “taught like a sail” (the speaker’s jacket) and “skimming like butter on a hot skillet” (the speaker’s skates). The following poems are about surprises and they endeavor to use a simile to bring the reader closer to the action!
The day I shared a room
By Raven
My mom told me
that I had to share a room with
my five year old sister
she was as happy as a penguin
my oldest sister
got a room to herself and I was
surprised as a ghost she was cheerful
as a chick.
My Poem
By Malorie
My name is Malorie and
this is thee story about
me and my mom fun
day!
My mom told me
that I’m loud like the
theme park because I was
on the rollercoaster that’s
why my mom told me
that I was loud.
My little kittens
By Alphonse
I was in bed my brother wake me up
I look under the bed
my cat was sleeping like
a sloth I flash some light
I saw a kitten 3 of them
The surprisement of Christmas
By Deziah
One lovely night aka morning
there was a big green tree
I have realized it was a
Christmas tree. I was so
excited. to know what I
had. I saw some presents
under the tree and I opened
it I had a lot of stuff
under the tree and that
is when I was surprisement.
and I had a hooverboard
some necklace and new shoes
and a toy kitchen and makeup
and a VR set. It was fun
I played with it for hours.
The Surprise
By Michael
I was ready for school when
my mom stopped me like I was gonna do something
bad but there was someone waiting for me.
I stayed home but then we drove to the airport
we were going to the Bahamas.
I was surprised as a mouse getting caught.
Scene 75
By Taraji
A time when I was suprised
when my mom took me to Scene 75 for
my birthday.
I got on the roller coasters with
my sister, cousin, and friends.
When the ride started the wind hit my face.
The wind hit my face like
a bunch of feathers at one time.
It was fun next time I go
I’ll have more fun.
And I was surprised like
a baby chicken.
